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Guess the Plot

The Black Circle

1. He’s lived a protracted life, all the time spinning till it was an excessive amount of to bear. Now he is turn out to be unhinged and may’t even stand on his personal with out spinning uncontrolled. It’s unhappy if you lose your one function in life, particularly if you’re a sentient revolving door.

2. When Rideroc thrusts Val into the middle of a plot to breed a military of magic-infused shapeshifters, she should determine whether or not to place her nation in danger or begin a romantic relationship with the man. 

3. When a black circle seems sooner or later within the automotive park of Green Valley High, all people assumes it’s the work of bored college students. Only Sharla, daughter of vampire hunters is aware of it’s true meaning- and is aware of the terrifying menace that each one the nice trying college students will shortly face.

4. When mankind strikes into area, the black spot, given to condemned traitors on a pirate vessel, is up to date to a black circle for the area age. Alin has no need to exit an airlock mild years from any planets with or with no area swimsuit. He has no recourse however to mutiny all by himself. With the ship’s hacked AI after all.

5. A various group of Gen Alpha preteens break into an outdated, decrepit home the place they uncover an deserted assortment of vinyl records. Soon afterward they start cancelling their Spotify accounts, sneering at individuals carrying AirPods, and blathering about “superior sound high quality” …till a heroic GenXer takes them to activity, smashes their albums, and saves the day as a result of it is a feel-good story, not some Stephen King coming-of-age ripoff.

6. Ever since that journey to South America that Ferdi was too drunk to recollect, she’s been seeing a black spot present up right here, there, on her doorstep, on her pillowcase. Might it have one thing to do with the Vodun cult she could have visited? It’s most likely simply an excessive amount of tequila. She ought to swap to rum.

7. Karen simply desires to put in writing novels for a residing, however literary brokers received’t acknowledge her existence. She already removed the pentagram underneath her mattress, the homunculus in her basement, and the monkey’s paw she stole. What else could possibly be giving her such unhealthy luck? Unless . . . Maybe it is all these crows circling her home.


Original Version

Dear [Agent’s name],

Vallinore, a scholar dispatched to renegotiate a truce with a metropolis dominated by a brutal king, [A city with a king? Wait, is this based on that TV show, The King of Queens?] was all the time marginalized on account of her standing because the emperor’s bastard. Fed up, she plans to desert her duties post-mission and defect. 

Rideroc, town’s Lord Commander, is hell-bent on liberating his individuals from the king’s tyranny. He ropes in Vallinore’s distinctive experience in historic languages to trace down the one artefact able to toppling the king, going as far as to threaten struggle on her nation if she refuses to assist. [Either you translate these cuneiform passages, or my city will attack your nation.] [The king rules a city, Vallinore hails from a nation, Vallinore’s father is an emperor, presumably of an empire? 

And the Lord Commander of the city is threatening war?]

Vallinore doesn’t plan for [figure on] Rideroc’s gravitational pull. As they peel again layers of pretence and forge a deeper bond, a stunning prophecy emerges, thrusting Vallinore at [into] the centre of an historic lineage and making her the goal of the king’s plot to breed a military of magic-infused shapeshifters. [Whoa, just when I was thinking Roman Empire, it’s become Galactic Empire.] [Though I must admit that was one of the most amazing sentences in query history.] 

Rideroc and Vallinore should select whether or not to flee and defending Vallinore from the King’s relentless pursuit, or danger all the pieces in a daring try and liberate town.

THE BLACK CIRCLE is a twin POV Adult Romantic Fantasy full at 118,000 phrases with sequence potential. It combines Jennifer L. Armentrout’s FALL OF RUIN AND WRATH’s exploitative relationship between the protagonists and people in authority with Rebecca Yarros’s THE FOURTH WING’s enemies-to-lovers dynamic.

Thank you in your time and consideration,

Notes

Not clear to me why this scholar who has studied historic languages is the goal of a plot to create a military of shapeshifters. Is "goal of" the suitable phrase? Maybe "key to"? What does the stunning prophecy predict, precisely? That a girl will arrive within the metropolis and translate some Sanskrit glyph directions on the right way to create 1000’s of magical shapeshifters?

Lord Commander Rideroc appears like the right identify in your villain. Your hero must be the king’s son, Prince Lenny. 

Also, Rideroc sounds quite a bit like Roderick. 

Vallinore plans to defect . . . to the place? The brutal king’s metropolis? 

You name this a romantic fantasy, however there’s little about romance right here, only a imprecise point out of forging a bond and a gravitational pull (that Vallinore in some way feels proper after Rideroc threatens struggle along with her nation). 

Rideroc: Do as I ask, or my military will invade your nation. 

Vallinore: Are you seeing anybody?

If you will get the romance angle in earlier it will assist: 

Dispatched to barter a truce with a metropolis dominated by a brutal king, Vallinore meets with town’s good-looking Lord Commander, Rideroc, who’s hell-bent on liberating his individuals from the king’s tyranny. Rideroc makes a nasty first impression, threatening struggle on Vallinore’s nation until she helps him topple the king. But although Rideroc looks as if an actual a-hole, Vallinore can not help discovering him lovable, type of like Hugh Grant.

Wait, change that final line with: But although Vallinore finds Rideroc missing in social graces, she will be able to’t assist admiring his ardour for serving to his people–not to say his ripped 6’3" body. No, not fairly that, however we’re getting nearer.

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March 3, 2024 at 08:12PM

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